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The widespread of use of the internet has made it possible for employees to work from home while still being connected to their office. Some people believe working from home should be encouraged because it is beneficial for employees and companies. Do you agree or disagree?

With technology improving swiftly, people can easily access
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the internet and most
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workers
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the workers
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 have personal computer or laptop, which make people start to consider the possibility of working from
home
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. In
following
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 essay, I will explain why I agree that working from
home
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 can benefit both
employees
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 and companies. There are considerable merits for those who work from
home
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. One positive effect is that commuters no longer need to commute between
home
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 and office on a daily
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. These
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 not only can save commuting time and money but
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 can reduce the psychologically stress from commuting.
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, workers are able to have
a sufficient sleep
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 or spend more time with their family, which conduce them to enhance working efficiency. Another advantage is that
employees
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 have flexibility
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workplace
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a workplace
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 and more control over working hours, and these would improve their productivity.
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, companies which encourage
employees
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working
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 from
home
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 can cut businesses cost owing to fewer
worker
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workers
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 in the office.
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,
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the firm
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firm
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firms
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 can rent smaller workrooms to reduce rental and the electricity expense will decrease too.
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, curtailing energy consumption can reduce the carbon footprint, which can help
company
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the company
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 to achieve the goal of net zero emission.
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 but not least, corporate are less likely to suffer from lost working hours due to public transportation
delay
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 or awful weather.
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,
company
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 can increase profit significantly when
employees
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 work from
home
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. In conclusion, working from
home
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 can benefit both
employees
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 and companies
in
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 different perspectives.
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, I will consent that people should be motivated to work from
home
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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