Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they should challenge the old thoughts. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

In our modern society, it is quite easy to see
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of
opinions
between different generations. Some
people
believe that
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generation
should
listen
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well ideas of the old one,
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others argue that they should challenge the old
opinions
. In
this
essay, both
view
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will be discussed,
then
I will state my opinion in conclusion.
First
of all, some
people
think that teenagers should follow the old thoughts because of the
religion
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aspect.
For example
, respecting older
people
is
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vital for most
of
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religions, especially Buddhism which is believed by the majority of the citizens in my country.
Moreover
, they have an opportunity that employees get fired if we do not follow elderly
opinions
in a company which
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to a quite difficult situation for their life.
Thus
,
this
makes clear that teenagers should listen carefully
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old
generation
.
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contrast, others believe that the younger
generation
should challenge the old ideas for making our society better.
For instance
, new ideas from them are able to change companies in a wonderful way even though usually older
people
do not prefer changing systems. Recent research conducted by a famous university in New York showed that the United States have a large number of
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successful
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successful
companies because they can express their opinion to the old
generation
.
Therefore
, it has become apparent that teenagers should say their
opinions
. In conclusion, we discussed both
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in terms of religions and making our life better. In my opinion, we should challenge the old thoughts because
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generation
´s
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ideas
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with the new technology can change our society in a good way considerably. After a thorough analysis of
this
subject, it is predicted that the younger
generation
will try to express their
opinions
more in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhere to
  • guidance
  • wisdom
  • societal continuity
  • traditions
  • cultural values
  • life experiences
  • career choices
  • relationships
  • moral dilemmas
  • question
  • challenge
  • conventional wisdom
  • foster innovation
  • status quo
  • societal evolution
  • outdated practices
  • contemporary standards
  • critical thinking
  • adaptability
  • rapidly changing world
  • scrutinizing
  • inclusive
  • equitable
  • efficient systems
  • balanced approach
  • empowered
  • outdated or harmful traditions
  • preservation
  • innovation
  • refining
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