For many people, the reason they work hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is an undeniable fact that people have to earn to satisfy their basic necessities.

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, many people claim that they put

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efforts to get more income. I completely agree with

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video as

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can result

into

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financial stability, better social status and independence in life.

To begin

with, one of the possible reasons for

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view is to attain financial security.

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individuals work hard they will get enough

money

to save and

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investments which leads to financial stability. To exemplify, working for longer hours can provide individuals with

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extra

money

which indirectly increases

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goals he

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said.

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to

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putting

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enough efforts

at

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job

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that gives payment provide independence. In regards to

this

, people are

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dependent on someone for

the

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income because we can manage and

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be accountable

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accountable

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for any

situations

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.

For instance

,some members borrow

money

from family members and

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on them in certain scenarios

Furthermore

, giving efforts in the job that in return provides capital

also

helps to boost social status. If adults have more

money

they will receive that appreciation and respect from the community. Not only

they

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become powerful but

also

uplift their personality in

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society. To conclude, citizens tend to do more work to get wages and

that is

the reason which

bring

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opportunities to achieve economic stability,

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benchmark

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in the community and

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self-dependent in various phases of life. There for, I totally agree with

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view so that one can get possible outcomes.