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There have been many inventions in the human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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As a result
 of evolution and circumstances, humanity has invented numerous modern technologies and tools like tyres to thrive and sustain in the contemporary era. Whether
internet
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 is the
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 invention of all time is a debatable question. In my personal opinion, I consider it
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a flawed statement, and my reasoning is analysed in the ensuing paragraphs.
Firstly
,
although
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 is one of the greatest
invention
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, quoting it as the most important one is not acceptable because
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 each and every
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 has its own relevance. The urge of finding a solution for minimising human effort is the prime reason
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 an invention. To explain
further
, all the inventions are interconnected to each other.
For instance
, in order to fall on the idea of a connectivity feature, people needed a device to operate that
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 complex algorithms to enter the
world
 of binary numbers. Even though the efforts are tremendous, the outcome is not only the victory of the end founder but
also
 the factors that supported them which
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 the contributions of ancestors.
Secondly
, a union of findings and discoveries is the success of every new outcome. To make it more clear, almost every result of an experiment has its own importance. Because of the readily available energy source like electricity, everyone in
this
world
 has the opportunity to explore various sectors by utilising the facility.
Moreover
, it helps to pave
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 to a society with a sheer number of enthusiasts in different topics who got talents.
Therefore
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standalone inventions
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its
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 main role in strengthening the
world
 for future products and services. To conclude,
although
 the cyber
world
 is the
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 change humans ever witnessed, the other contributions have got equal importance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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