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Nowadays,environment problems are too big to managed by individual person or individual countries.In other words it is an international problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#environment #person #countries
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Environment pollution has been a pressing dilemma throughout the years.
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 massive mistake might not be able to rectify by one man not a single country.
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 has become a global issue currently.I completely agree and my ideas justify the same.
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,polluting air,
contaminating
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and contaminating
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 water is an act
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 done by
community
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the community
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result
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 severe
mistake
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 like
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 can not happen overnight.
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,negligence of
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society is the major reason for
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 error.
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,it had already
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on
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local's lives by turning them unhealthier.Already
variety
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a variety
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 of diseases
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 emerged.
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,due to usage of polluted water has become the reason
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for
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fore
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 more than 50% of people who suffer from acute kidney failure.
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 and most importantly dirtying of forests,ecological disasters and emission of carbonic acids
leads
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 to global warming.
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 that primarily due to the burning of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 is the major reason.Since deterioration of world' s ecology means the acts should be taken worldwide co-operations as well as preventive measures.To exemplify,since 1800 human activity has been the major cause
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 global warming. To conclude,As I mentioned earlier damage to the environment done by
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the community
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 cannot be handled by a single folk.
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 has extended throughout the world so
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prevention and
controlling
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 measures should take
from
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 global organizations.
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