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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teachign sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is currently debatable whether giving services
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 the
neighborhood
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 free of charge is mandatory for high-schoolers or not. In
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 essay, the reason why
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 measure should be carried out will be explored while clarifying my own opinion to support
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 belief.
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 of all, it cannot be denied that
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 activity can enlarge our social circles and
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, can improve our communication which is now considered
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an essential skill.
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 means that if we do outdoor activities
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 as giving guidance to tourists,
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 or accompanying elder
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, our social skills will undoubtedly make progress as we have to interact with other
people
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.
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, despite being introverted, if one is made to do community services, he will at least know how to behave well and formally, which are versatile life skills at the workplace,
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 his personality has not changed. Due to
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 fact, it is credible and worthwhile.
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, we can enjoy a warm glow inside our hearts which can only be gained from helping others intentionally.
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, hypothetically speaking,
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behavior
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 can not only act
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 a motivation to the helper but
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 make the person, who needs help, feel happy.
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, if someone helps elder
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 cross the road or accompanies them, that day will be another peaceful day for them as well as their family and
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,
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 happiness will spread like a virus around the world simply because of
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 manner.
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, it is a win-win but many
people
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 are still underestimating those benefits. In conclusion, I personally believe that free-of-charge community services ought to be acknowledged as an essential part of high school activities as
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 can be of great help to students both at present and in the future.
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