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Some people think children should have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In our modern society, taking care of our
children
 is one of the biggest challenges for adults. People have different views about making
mistakes
 of
children
. While there are some good arguments in
favor
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 of having freedom for
children
 to make
mistakes
. I believe that it is better for parents to prevent youngsters from making
mistakes
. On one hand, there are parents who implement freedom in their life, including how to nurture their youngsters. It is acknowledged that there are some impacts if they are making too many spaces for their
children
 in daily activities. As a consequence, the
children
 are possible to do violent, and they exactly do not know which one is wrong or right.
For instance
, my friend who grew up in a freedom family is making some crimes when they grow up as adolescents; drugs, and gambling.
On the other hand
, people tend to believe that
children
's prevention from making
mistakes
 is their parents’ task.
This
 parenting style makes the
children
 aware of the rules in their activities.
Furthermore
, it is considered to be safer for adults, youngsters, and their friends.
For example
, my
neighbor
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 who has two
children
 that are controlled to make
mistakes
 is always proud of them because of their good attitudes and get achievements in their school.
Finally
, I believe that parents have a responsibility to take care of and prevent their
children
 to make
mistakes
 because it has a beneficial impact on personal development and their future.
This
 is as long as
children
 are given a wide range to explore their creativity and interest.
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