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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. discuss post this views and give your own opinion.

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Currently, many believe that it is necessary to spend loads of money in order to establish new railway
lines
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 for super fast trains among cities while others think making improvements
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existing
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the existing
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 public
transport
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 system is much more important. in the following
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 I will discuss
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both issues and
i
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 will mention my opinion. On the one
hand
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 there is no
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 that constructing new
lines
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 for fast trains can be extremely beneficial for
transportation
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the transportation
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 of goods between cities and
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 for those who travel among Cities a lot because they can go
further
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 distances in
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shorter time.
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instance
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 once I was in Pavia and
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 wanted to go to Milan. by using fast trains it just took me 10 minutes to get to Milan.
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hand
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 constructing these
lines
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 are so expensive and
buy
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by
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 spending the same amount of money
government
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 can make lots of renovations
in
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existing
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the existing
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 public
transport
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 system.
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, improving
exist
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transport
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 system is more profitable for
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government
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the government
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 because
cost
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the cost
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 of using exit
transport
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 is higher and
also
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 by exporting goods to other countries
government
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 can earn a lot. In
conclusion
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 constructing railway
lines
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 and improving existing public
transport
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 are both equally important and in my
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opinion
opinien
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opinion
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government
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the government
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 should spend the same amount of money on both of them.
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