• In many countries small shops and town centres are going out of business, because people tend to drive to the large out-of-town stores. This results in an increase in car use, and it also means that people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores. Do you think advantages of such development outweigh its disadvantages?

It is becoming increasingly normal and standard that
majority
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of people in developed countries start buying goods in big
malls
located outside of towns and cities, and
this
only suits the car owners. While
this
approach is convenient and can save time for those who can afford a car, it does the opposite for poorer social classes. In my opinion,
this
is a negative tendency that more creates severe problems than provides solutions. Before big
malls
became a thing and cars stopped being a luxury, in a typical middle-size city it could take the whole day to buy goods for the week, because shops were so dispersed across the cities. It is a very natural development that businesses started buying vacant pieces of land to build
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big
stores
that would have everything available. Today,
malls
are making the walking distances significantly shorter,
thus
saving a lot of time. In a single
day
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an average person with a car can now reach a lot more shops than before,
also
making the market
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overall.
However
,
malls
not only bring
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benefits. Nowadays the traffic jams and very polluted air, especially around big
stores
, are a commonality. Not only
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buyers need to drive there, but
also
a lot of workers,
such
as cashiers, which cannot often afford cars and
therefore
have to use slow and unreliable public transport. Some
stores
stay in the city
centers
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, but to stay afloat as businesses, they have to raise prices, making it even more difficult for non-car owners. In conclusion, on one hand, the out-of-town
stores
and
malls
are a time saver and overall
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useful invention.
On the other hand
, they only make life easier for people who are well-off, but more difficult for poorer classes
instead
. I believe that governments should work on making life comfortable for those in need and introduce regulations that would help to find
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compromise.
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