In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Many
people
believe that young people
should have a year
off for work
or travel
before start
to Change the form of the verb
starting
study
in universities. From my point of view, there are both advantages and disadvantages for
Change preposition
to
this
assertion. On the one hand, there are some advantages when young people
have a year
to enjoy their life and experience working
environment. Correct article usage
a working
Firstly
, it is a chance to relax after 12 years of study
and adults may have time to think carefully about their careers and hobbies during travelling
period. Add an article
the travelling
Furthermore
, the overall
experiment of travel
to new places is eye-opening and breath-taking. Young people
will understand about cultures and customs in
other countries. Change preposition
of
Therefore
, they may have colorful
life and unforgettable memories during Change the spelling
colourful
time
of Correct pronoun usage
their time
travel
. Secondly
, one year
of working provide more experiment for young people
and realize the different
between theories and practices. Replace the word
difference
Thus
, students
will be equipped well before starting university studies. On the other hand
, young people
should consider carefully before decide
to take a gap Change the form of the verb
deciding
year
of study
to travel
or work
. The amount of money for travel
is a heavy burden to their parents so it should be impractical for young people
who decide to do this
. Additionally
, students
still lack of
Remove the preposition
apply
experiences
Fix the agreement mistake
experience
for
working so it is hard to find a good job with Change preposition
apply
high
salary if they just Correct article usage
a high
finish
high school. Wrong verb form
finished
Moreover
, students
may not good
at motivating to Add a missing verb
be good
study
after one year
because a year
off to work
and travel
is quite long. In conclusion, a gap year
to work
or travel
has both advantages and disadvantages. Hence
, students
should thinks
carefully before Change the verb form
think
decide
to do Change the form of the verb
deciding
this
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