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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Raising a child is very important to society. A successful family will create a strong generation to build the future,
hence
 giving lectures and enhancing subjects to youth while they are in schools and university will help them in the future to raise their children. I agree about the idea of including
this
 in their education system, and in
this
 essay, I will provide examples to support my opinion. Nowadays, if we look at the average age of married couples, we will find that young people are getting married in late 20 years old, which is having benefits,
for example
, children will be raised with
parents
 that their age gap is not big and will help
parents
 to understand the needs of a new generation.
In addition
 to
this
,
this
 can help countries to increase the number of youth people which will lead to support for the economy by young force labour.
However
, raising a child at
this
 age needs awareness and understanding
about
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 the needs and requirements of the babies which will come either by experience or by education of the
parents
. And since
parents
 did not have experience before about
this
, it will e beneficial to create an educational course in the school and university to provide full information about the role and responsibility of father and mother and what are the important actions for newborn babies.
In addition
 to
this
, provide a gathering program where
parents
 can share their ideas and experiences to learn from others how to raise a child. In conclusion, I believe that building a strong community will start by building strong families and
this
 can not be done by only
parents
, but
also
 with the support of government and society through
parents
' events and gatherings.
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