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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

#computer #effects #children
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In
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 modern era, we can see that technology become an important part of our daily activity across all generations from retired people,
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 employees,
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 in universities and
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 in schools. The question
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 always raised as a concern is, Do computers bring positive or negative values to
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? In
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, I will present the advantages and disadvantages of letting
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 use computers in their daily activities. Since the beginning of the 20th century, the education system has changed and became matched the demands of the workforce.
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,
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 requires to include a subject in
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's studies on how to use a
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,
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 developing software and using Microsoft word to write an assignment for their studies. By ,
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 we can see that
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 will be able to practice from an early age using these technologies which will be needed when they are in university and working in companies.
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, there is room for the negative side that might be a concern,
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, using a
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 to
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 on an
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 will affect the ability of
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 to do some research and read books to find the answers to the
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 subject, since the internet did not leave any information hidden from individuals, which will end up that student might find the
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 ready to be copied.
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 to
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, letting
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work
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 for a long time on the
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 throughout the day will lead to mental fatigue and health problems as minimal activities are required while using the
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 except, typing on a keyboard and looking into the screen. In summary, I believe that
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 using a
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 is having positive and negative side,
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 school and parents should
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 hand in hand to weight the amount of time which youth should use a
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 in their study subject.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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