By punishing murders with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days, it is controversial that a state-sanctioned practice of killing a person as a punishment for a crime is too intense for offenders, as people are afraid of being guilty of committing murder, and prefer to retain bad guys in prison longer or forever.
While
opponents including me disagree with the statement due to
wasting the authority's money and ineffectively discouraging bad guys. In this
essay, the reason to support my disagreement will be presented before my conclusion is reached.
The predominant reason that the authority
should continue the death penalty is Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
wasting
the budget to take care of them and Change the verb form
to waste
increasing
work for officers. In Wrong verb form
increase
another word
, each prisoner needs a lot of financial resources to look after including food, medicines, clothes, and space. Fix the agreement mistake
other words
Moreover
, the plethora of inmates can increase the workload of officers. For example
, the government need to hire more officers to look after the higher number of prisoners. According to
a BBC news report, 20 per cent of the nation's finance
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finances
is
spent on the inmates in the jails.
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Furthermore
, retaining the offenders in the
prison Correct article usage
apply
instead
of the death punishment is not a promising method to disincentivize people who tend to commit a crime because they do
not afraid of the weak penalty and decide to Verb problem
are
do
guilty. Verb problem
commit
For instance
, in 2009, the Thai government in the era of Mr Taksin Shinawat imposed laws to allow Thai polices
to kill drug sellers, regardless of the number of drugs that they occupy. As Correct subject-verb agreement
police
the
result, the number of narcotic Correct article usage
a
drugs case
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drug cases
whether
sellers and buyers in Thailand dramatically declined during that time. Change preposition
between
Therefore
, intensive penalties like execution can discourage individuals to commit
a crime.
In conclusion, Change preposition
from committing
according to
the aforementioned reasons, which shows that the death penalty is more effective than retaining life in prison due to
saving money for the country and discentivitizing bad guys. Presumably, I strongly disagree with the views to ban the sanction of killing prisoners.Submitted by pantamitsaekong on
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Address the prompt more directly and provide a balanced argument for both sides of the issue.
coherence and cohesion
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