Some people say that industrial growth is necesary to solve proverty, but some other people argue that industrial growth is leading to poverty and should be stopped. Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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The usefulness of industrial growth for every country is debatable. Some individuals hold the opinion that it is needed to reduce poverty while other
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that the number of needy
people
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is increasing with
industrial
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the industrial
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rise.
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essay will discuss both perspectives and I think that solvency is rising with industrial growth.
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with,
people
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who say that industrial progress is noteworthy to reduce scarcity think that
peoples
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are getting lots of unemployment with its rise. The development of
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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sector creates
a huge numbers
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of job
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opportunities
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which can lead to
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rate of unemployment and help
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to live their life delightedly.
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, more and more industry and
factory
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the factory
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makes
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a
countries
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economy strong
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it will help to enrich the lifestyle of
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the needy
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community.
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,
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who
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become developed is just because
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they have
bigger
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industrial field which creates working facility for their population.
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, the more industry
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a country
, the
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less unemployment there will be. 
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, others
people
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who say, industrial prosperity is the reason for poverty assert that industrialisation is increasing
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the gap
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between wealthy and needy
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. Because of it, the
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rich
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peoples
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people
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are becoming reacher whereas poor
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people
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become
more
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poorer.
Industry
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creates work
opportunity
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opportunities
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,
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but provides a nominal salary to their labourer than their profit resulting in they are finding trouble
to maintain
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their daily activities.
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lead
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to become their life harder
to
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harder.
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, it was often observed that companies owner purchase one after another luxurious
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vehicles
continuously while worker finds lots of unexpected
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to bear their
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daily
basic demands.
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, it is leading to create social degeneration among
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. In conclusion,
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industrialisation may create
a
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huge employment by working their
people
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cam reduce scarcity, it
also
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expend
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contraposition among owner
amd
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and
worker. I think that
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problem can be solved
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bureaucracy makes
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regulations
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of
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employers
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payment
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payments
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so that they can sustain their daily needs. So, the deficits of industrial growth are completely negligible compared to the benefits.
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