Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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In today's world, there is a heavy debate about all human beings are born equal and

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every male and female are capable of doing the same

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others disagree with

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statement saying there are some areas in which female genders cannot

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is because of the strength difference in the body and the nature of the job they

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in. On the one hand, I believe that through hard

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and dedication every human whoever it is, can achieve anything in

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world. There are many places where people of all genders

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together because of the skills they possess which do not need much physical power.

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, working in an IT department depends purely on the talent of the employee and anybody in

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world can gain

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without necessarily having muscle power.

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, every employment on the Earth is not like that. On the flip side, there are certain places where females cannot operate because of their physical nature. Oil rigs,

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, are a place that requires working on heavy machinery which takes a lot of boot strength to handle them. So, men possessing a stronger personality are chosen for

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type of

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, which cannot be found in the opposite gender. By nature, women are weaker in

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area and

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cannot compete with men. In conclusion, even though all humans are created equal there is a lack of strength in females which restricts them from operating in some fields. Specially, where muscle power is required on the talent.

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coherence cohesion

Rephrase some sentences for better readability and flow. For example, the first sentence can be simplified to: 'There is a heavy debate in today's world about whether men and women are capable of doing the same work.'

task achievement

Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing the main points more effectively. Currently, it feels slightly repetitive and could be clearer.

task achievement

Your essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument, showing a balanced viewpoint.

task achievement

You use relevant examples to support your points, which helps illustrate your arguments well.

coherence cohesion

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, making it easy to follow.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

258 words

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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

Your opinion

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