Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

In today's world, there is a heavy debate about all human beings are born equal and
hence
every male and female are capable of doing the same
work
,
while
others disagree with
this
statement saying there are some areas in which female genders cannot
work
.
This
is because of the strength difference in the body and the nature of the job they
work
in. On the one hand, I believe that through hard
work
and dedication every human whoever it is, can achieve anything in
this
world. There are many places where people of all genders
work
together because of the skills they possess which do not need much physical power.
For example
, working in an IT department depends purely on the talent of the employee and anybody in
this
world can gain
this
without necessarily having muscle power.
However
, every employment on the Earth is not like that. On the flip side, there are certain places where females cannot operate because of their physical nature. Oil rigs,
for instance
, are a place that requires working on heavy machinery which takes a lot of boot strength to handle them. So, men possessing a stronger personality are chosen for
this
type of
work
, which cannot be found in the opposite gender. By nature, women are weaker in
this
area and
hence
cannot compete with men. In conclusion, even though all humans are created equal there is a lack of strength in females which restricts them from operating in some fields. Specially, where muscle power is required on the talent.
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