The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the
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recent
years
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there has been a significant shift in the
media
towards bringing to light horrifying problems rather than emphasizing
on
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positive outcomes and
news
. Some believe
this
is damaging to society,
however
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I bet to disagree with
this
statement, because constant
negativity
fuels adaptability and brings emotional,
financial
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benefits. Confronting
negativity
can give a sense of adaptability and safety later,
thus
it is not harmful, but rather healing for society. If exposed to
negativity
for prolonged periods of time,
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human
minds
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will create coping and defensive.
For example
,
news
about an ongoing war that has lasted for years. At
first
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it is terrifying, but after
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period of time military conflict is becoming
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background noise. People and the
media
adjust to war as if it were a part of their daily routine.
This
instance proves the reason why I believe
media
focuses more on the negative aspects of life and does not damage its viewers. Global problems and emergencies bring adrenaline and create an illusion that life seems interesting, rather than harmful. It is evident that reports about ongoing terrible events get lots of views on online services. As a consequence,
news
and
media
have larger budgets
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keeping their subscribers in touch with recent disastrous events,
thus
fueling the production and need to emphasize
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negativity
.
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above demonstrates why I think problems are
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the
center
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of attention more, than positive developments, and are not damaging, but are rather engaging.
Although
, constant
media
events
negativity
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and negativity
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can be seen
harmful
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as harmful
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,
however
, in my opinion,
the
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society benefits from
this
exposure far more. Constantly confronting
negativity
help develop essential coping mechanisms and bring large revenue to
news
services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • news reports
  • media focus
  • negative news
  • positive developments
  • stress and anxiety
  • skewed perception of reality
  • world view
  • desensitization
  • pessimistic outlook
  • general public
  • mental well-being
  • proactive problem-solving
  • holistic view
  • informed decision-making
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