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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the
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recent
years
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 there has been a significant shift in the
media
 towards bringing to light horrifying problems rather than emphasizing
on
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positive outcomes and
news
. Some believe
this
 is damaging to society,
however
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 I bet to disagree with
this
 statement, because constant
negativity
 fuels adaptability and brings emotional,
financial
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and financial
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 benefits. Confronting
negativity
 can give a sense of adaptability and safety later,
thus
 it is not harmful, but rather healing for society. If exposed to
negativity
 for prolonged periods of time,
then
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 human
minds
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mind
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 will create coping and defensive.
For example
,
news
 about an ongoing war that has lasted for years. At
first
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 it is terrifying, but after
significant
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 period of time military conflict is becoming
a
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background noise. People and the
media
 adjust to war as if it were a part of their daily routine.
This
 instance proves the reason why I believe
media
 focuses more on the negative aspects of life and does not damage its viewers. Global problems and emergencies bring adrenaline and create an illusion that life seems interesting, rather than harmful. It is evident that reports about ongoing terrible events get lots of views on online services. As a consequence,
news
 and
media
 have larger budgets
from
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 keeping their subscribers in touch with recent disastrous events,
thus
 fueling the production and need to emphasize
on
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negativity
.
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 above demonstrates why I think problems are
in
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 the
center
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 of attention more, than positive developments, and are not damaging, but are rather engaging.
Although
, constant
media
 events
negativity
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and negativity
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 can be seen
harmful
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as harmful
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,
however
, in my opinion,
the
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society benefits from
this
 exposure far more. Constantly confronting
negativity
 help develop essential coping mechanisms and bring large revenue to
news
 services.
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