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As technology improves, there will be fewer jobs for people in the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#technology #jobs #people #future
Modern
technology
 has a significant impact
in
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on
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 our society. In the past, previous generations did not have the same access to the tools and advancements we benefit
today
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from today
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. Nowadays, applied science helps us in many different situations.
Firstly
,
technology
 has a significant impact on various aspects of our lives.
For example
, at work, we
use
 the internet or our phones to complete tasks, and every day we rely on laptops or televisions. One of the advantages of
technology
 is that when we don't know something, we can search for it on the
internet
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.
Additionally
,
technology
 helps us communicate with
people
 around the world, no matter where we are. Nowadays,
technology
 can perform many roles,
such
 as a virtual teacher or legal assistant.
For example
, when I visited a restaurant in China, I was served by a robot, which was a unique experience.
On the other hand
, modern
technology
 has changed the way
people
 think, and it has introduced new problems like cyberbullying.
Additionally
,
people
 are exposed to many things online that can negatively affect their health. One of the disadvantages of modern
technology
 is that it makes
people
 increasingly lazy.
For example
, at my school, my classmates often
use
 ChatGPT to complete their homework, which I feel is unfair because they receive high grades
while
 I don’t.
Moreover
, my teachers
also
use
this
 tool, but they don't mention that they rely on it for their work. In conclusion, modern
technology
 was created to help us, but we need to
use
 it in moderation;
otherwise
, we might become too dependent on it, almost like robots in the future. Words : 260
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task achievement
Provide a clearer stance on whether you agree or disagree with the statement in the introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
Ensure all paragraphs directly address the essay question about future job prospects due to technology.
coherence cohesion
Achieve better coherence by linking the second paragraph's content with the essay question more directly.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the context of technology's impact.
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Examples, like the robot in China, add specificity and interest.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion provides a personal perspective on balanced technology use.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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