In some countries, the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Across the globe, purchased
guns
for self-defence and recreational purposes
has
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significantly increased
quantity
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the quantity
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of shootings.
Therefore
, gun usage is one of
most
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prevailing and worrying aspects
in
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of
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any society.
Hence
, I am going to examine how dangerous gun is for habitants of a region.
Firstly
, adolescents can be endangered by recreational
guns
which
is
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legal in numerous countries.
In other words
,
guns
require owners to know enough
knowledges
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knowledge
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for using them correctly while most
of
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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do not read instructions and guides before starting to use
guns
. As a consequence, they become
victim
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victims
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them self
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themself
themselves
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.
For instance
, a study by the University of Queensland indicates that more than
one
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third
of shootings'
casualtiesin
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casualties in
the United States are children who are injured or killed in street conflicts.
This
is because American authorities were unable to limit gun ownership among citizens.
Secondly
, family violence can be executed by
guns
unwantedly.
This
means that spouses who have
guns
for self-defence might use their
guns
when they reach
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point of sexual violence.
For example
, a recent study by the Tehran University reveals that 45
percent
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of conflicts in American families lead to
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a woman
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woman
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women
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being injured by
knife
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knives
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or
guns
. To conclude, based on convincing
evidences
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evidence
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,I strongly believe that
guns
play an important role in having upward trend shootings
in
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on
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continents and think that government must seek
for
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a deterrent or limitation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gun ownership
  • shootings
  • increase
  • home
  • agree
  • disagree
  • impact
  • widespread
  • access
  • firearms
  • psychological
  • potential
  • statistics
  • examples
  • frequent
  • responsible
  • regulations
  • misuse
  • inequality
  • mental health
  • crime rates
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