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Some people think individuals cannot do anything to make the environment different, others think they can. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, so many problems are existing which are related to the environment. Several individuals suppose that they are not able to alter the environment, while others claim that they can. As human beings, we all can affect the world adversely and positively.
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 with, there are some issues that cannot be solved only with help of humankind, due to capacity, money, power, etc.
For instance
, humanity cannot make rare sorts of animals to breed. We are not able to change the season from winter to summer.
On the contrary
, society has problems that are connected with nature, say, air, water and land
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pollution
polution
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pollution
, climate changes, rising sea levels, etc. These consequences
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 caused by people. If they did not contaminate water, air and land, by throwing their garbage into them, they wouldn't get these problems.
Moreover
,
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community
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the communty
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communty
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community
have
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also
 a positive influence on the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
. It is a collective effort, say, everyone
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 to plant some trees in the area. It is a little bit
effort
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of effort
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,
however
,
this
 is result in reducing air pollution. To conclude,
i
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 personally suppose that everyone has
power
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the power
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 to change the
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enviroment
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environment
 in a better way for our future generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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