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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days people are talking about
main
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the main
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 environmental
problems
 of our time . few people say that it is the loss of particular species of
plants
 and
animals
 while others think there are other important environmental
problems
 . in my personal
opinion
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 I believe there
is
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are
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 so many
important
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more important
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problems
 than
loss
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the loss
a loss
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 of
plants
 and
animals
. On the
one
hand
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 we can
loss
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lose
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 very valuable and unrecoverable species of
plants
 and
animals
 which can
effect
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affect
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for
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apply
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the balance of
environment
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the environment
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.
for example
, some
plants
 are very good medicine for illness like
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diabetes
diabeties
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diabetes
 and headache while animal helps for
environment
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the environment
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 by eating other
animals
.
On the other
hand
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 they are so many things which
important
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are important
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 to our environment like
plastic
pollution
. because of
plastic
pollution
 our beaches and see
animals
 facing
dangerous
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danger
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 and it is going high day by day for instants,
in
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2022 so many turtles and sea
animals
 died in Sri Lanka.
plastic
pollution
 is
one
 of the main environmental
problem
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problems
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 that we have to face.
Finally
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 I believe they are so many important environmental
problem
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problems
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 like
plastic
pollution
 . we cannot focus on only
one
 issue because there are so many of them. In
conclusion
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 environmental
problems
 are a big topic that we cannot point out
one
 issue . they are a number of
problems
 like
plastic
pollution
 that we have to find solutions
in
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to in
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 the future . we have to be careful with
the
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nature because we cannot live without it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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