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Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the *effects* of this on individuals and on the society?"

#people #time #home #*causes* #*effects* #individuals #society
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fact
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the fact
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 that
currentley
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currently
, a number of humans have been
spendig
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spending
time
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 at home
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less than previous. There are two main reasons which cause mentioned problem and
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 two essential effects on
people
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 and the community.
Firstly
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, enlarging of working
times
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 lead to that
employies
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employees
 can not reach their homes early. In the other words,
people
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 who ought to go job
for
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to
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 live
on
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have been starting to
work
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 at the
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beginning
begining
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beginning
 of the morning and have been leaving quite late
times
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 from
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work places
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workplaces
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.
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, if a usual white collar does not depart from
job
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a job
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 early, he will arrive to home late
abviously
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obviously
.
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, another reason is that transport
times
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 cause waste the
time
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 for society. In fact, humans who are living in the big cities have spent many
times
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 on way due to traffic congestion and distance which covers from their houses to
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work places
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workplaces
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. For
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instance
, ın Tokyo to arrive the
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 citizens have to consider traffic difficulties.
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, cited issues have effects on society and individuals
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.
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 of all, because these
people
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 can not spend
time
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 with their family
sufficently
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sufficiently
, members of these families can not understand the loving of a house. To illustrate, a child who is his father comes from
work
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 very late can not spend
time
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 with
parents
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his parents
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efficiently
efficently
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efficiently
.
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 of all, the
time
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 that the
people
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 are spending out of
house
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the house
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 much more than home lead to affect working citizens badly from
pshycological
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psychological
 aspect.
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, lack of enough hours for relaxing
cause
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causes
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 to feel
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tired
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tried
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tired
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 all the
time
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. To conclude, owing to long working
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time tables
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timetables
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 and transportation hardness, many members of society can not spend
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adequate
adequet
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adequate
 hours in their homes.
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, families of these
people
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 have been living unlovely situations and mentioned citizens
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 themself have been suffering from
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psychological
pshycological
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psychological
 problems.
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