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Social Media websites have amassed large user bases, and have become the sole source of information for their users. Do the advantages of being a part of a social media site outweigh the disadvantages?

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Thanks to the development of social
media
 and its effects on
people
's lifestyles, individuals spend more time surfing these websites. While there are several drawbacks of social
media
, I am of the opinion that these drawbacks will be eclipsed by the benefits, and my reasons will be elucidated in the rest of
this
 essay. The importance and utilization of social
media
 can not be denied these days.
People
 can find their old friends who have never seen them for a long time or probably have lost their contact numbers with the help of these
media
.
Moreover
, a lot of experts in many fields have provided their lessons and education throughout these platforms. Not only do individuals not have to commute through their cities for the learning process, but
also
 the cost of commuting and risk of accident or another dangerous event has increasingly reduced.
However
, alongside the benefits mentioned earlier, the negative aspect of paying more than necessary time for social
media
 brings negative consequences, which lead to social isolation and cultural influence on
people
's lifestyles, which leads to culture shock.
For instance
, many women tend to dress the same as some celebrities they follow on Instagram or Twitter, but as far as we know, we cannot dress like foreign
people
 as long as we have under several cultural restrictions. To conclude,
although
 social
media
 have several adverse effects, these platforms make it easy for us to obtain enormous information freely in any field which we have to travel a long distance in the city to learn. So, in my opinion, the advantages of using social
media
 outweigh its disadvantages.
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