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The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, teaching the
students
 by the use of corporal
punishment
 is diminished and
then
 it should be used to develop
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behaviour
vehaviour
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behaviour
. I totally disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, there are several punishments which are both effective and useful for the
students
 rather than corporal
punishment
.
For example
, taking a rest from
schools
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 for 1 week due to their mistakes is one of the most effective ways to teach them not to commit the same mistake again. And
then
, they will have to clean the toilets in school once a week if they did mistakes.
Moreover
, teaching them by physically hitting can make them hurt in
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their
there
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their
 bodies and is not a useful way
for
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 improving mindset and
behaviour
.
In addition
, they will forget their fault as soon as the pain in their bodies disappears.
Secondly
,
this
punishment
 can be embarrassing for high school
students
 and leads the
students
 to
the
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violent
behaviour
.
For instance
, his confidence will be significantly decreased whether it is hurt or not when a teacher hits the student in front of his friends.
Subsequently
, teenagers are straightforward to imitate whether they can have negative impacts or not.
Therefore
, they will be familiar with
this
behaviour
 if the teachers use
the
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corporal
punishment
 without thinking deeply. And
then
, they never hesitate to do
this
 habit and it leads them to
the
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violent
behaviour
. In conclusion, the use of corporal
punishment
 in school is decreased in
thesedays
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these days
.
Moreover
, it is excellent for every student and it should not be used to develop
behaviour
 because it will lead the
students
 to
the
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 aggressive world.
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