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Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It's argued that youngsters are supposed to be penalized as seriously as adults when they commit terrible crimes, like robbery or violent
attack
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. As for me, I totally agree with
this
 idea. On the one hand ，improving the level of
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 is an effective way to deter youth from doing illegal activities. Because the likelihood of losing freedom can make them think twice before violating
laws
. Some of them will not risk spending a number of months in
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jail so they are likely to obey
laws
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Furthermore
, strict punishment may
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 a negative impact on their career path .
For instance
, May companies will do background investigations in order to check if the interviewer has criminal acts . And It would be impossible for people who
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criminal
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 record to pass .
Therefore
, considering those consequences, they might choose to control themselves.
On the other hand
. Some people think youngsters  are not mature enough to
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 seriously the crimes are,so should give them
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However
, in fact, they have already
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learned it .
For example
, there are tons of cartoons or TU programmes 
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related to
laws
 which can teach them what is illegal and obey
laws
 .
Moreover
, In school, they are
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 not supposed to be done as well as what will be resulted . So
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age should not be an excuse to escape
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harsh punishment. In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people should be treated as same as adults
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 if they commit serious crimes.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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