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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people . Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In modern societies, young
people
 usually face the reality of housing. Owing to the rising price of real
estates
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, it is so difficult for youth to buy their own
house
.
Therefore
, most
people
 at a young age choose to rent a room
instead
 of buying a new one.
However
, some
people
 still pursue to own a home by themselves. It is so common in Asia societies,
such
 as China and Japan because the traditions and cultures indicate that a
house
 can build a sense of
belongings
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. Not only for an individual but
also
 for the whole family to create bonds with other members.
For example
, Taiwanese tended to purchase their
house
 due to many reasons, social pressure and the stereotype of
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the male
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male
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males
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 are the most common reasons. Because of
dignity
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the dignity
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 and requirements of marriage, most male
people
 are expected to have enough money to look after their family,
house
 and car become one of the standards.
Moreover
, from the aspect of business, some
people
 claimed that
house
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 is an asset, it could assist the owner to make a fortune if they apply their real
estates
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estate
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 properly. And even pass down
this
 asset to their descendants. In conclusion, I personally consider owning a home is positive for most
of
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people
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. I still believe that home is important for everyone because someone who had
its
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their
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her
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 own
house
 often
feel
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 comfortable and stable at any time. And it is
easily
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 to create a sense of safety and belongings with their family.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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