Some people believe that humans should be able to use animals for their own benefit, while others argue that the rights of animals should be protected. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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believe
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that
animals
should obey people while others
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that we should all protect all living
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. In my
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it is important not only to live in symbiosis with
animals
but
also
to use them when necessary, in
reasonable
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way.
First
of all, for ages generations have been using the power of
animals
in various works.
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they were participating in
construction
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of the most famous ancient buildings. Strong horses and bulls were pulling the vehicles all over the Europe and USA having
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great impact
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development
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of civilization.
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animals
were always part of traditional meals, mostly in northern countries
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temperatures were lower and animal fat was significant in diet guaranteeing
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in hard times. Physiologically the gastrointestinal
track
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of the human is adapted to digest
meat
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the meat
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of animal origin, including proteins, fat and diluted in
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. In my
opinion
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our generation
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a lot to
animals
on many different
level
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, as we will not be in the place where we are now without
its
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help.
On the other hand
, it is considered by many that
animals
are unique creatures that should be treated individually as they all have
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and
soul
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. They do not agree
for
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using
animals
on farms, zoos
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or
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ore
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circuses as it affects their freedom and welfare. All individuals should live in
its
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natural habit without
human's
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integration. It has been
also
believed by some, that it is not ethical to eat
animal's
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meet
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meat
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. Many believe that it is inappropriate to create the band with the
animals
, grow them and feed them to
finally
eat them when they become adult individuals.
This
may be a primal reason why some decide to be vegan or vegetarian. I think that it is necessary to include
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meet
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in our diet as our body is unable to synthesize certain supplements, but no matter what, we should always treat
animals
with respect and take care of their health and
conditions
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they live in. To conclude, it is important to use
animals
in
reasonable
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way , use them when it is necessary and protect
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them
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hem
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them
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when it is needed.
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