research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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acquired from
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and future development.
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. When children are just born, they are like pieces of white paper, without any existing contents there. To go through different things and learn from them is
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can understand many profound truths, broaden their horizons and gather lots of useful information, all of which will complete their values and views. They will surely know about kindness, selflessness and happiness through these
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become more mature adults. It is no doubt that born characters can make
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, how can they show their innate qualities to others?
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, a boy was born with a genetic talent
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playing basketball, but no one could know exactly about
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people
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can notice their special
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and have a certain promotion in future. In conclusion, acquired
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to more mature
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chances to find
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we have accumulated will definitely play a key role in our
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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