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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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"Health is Wealth"; it is important to be healthy for everybody. A healthy
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 is rich compared to a wealthy
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. To be healthy is very important to follow an admirable
diet
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 plan. Accompanied by a good
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, exercise
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 plays a crucial role in everybody's healthy lifestyle. In
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 essay, we will discuss the persons who follow a healthy lifestyle in my country and
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 see some reasons for
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 matter. On the one side, In my country, most
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 are from middle-class communities. These
people
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 will prefer to do work rather than care about their health. Almost, 25% of
people
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 in my country are unable to have their meal if they don't do any work.
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, a middle-class
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, who is working as a worker in a factory cannot feed their family without doing work regularly. On the other side, Nowadays, Most
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 who are wealthy are preferring to be healthy. Almost 55% of
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 are working in stress-related sectors like the film industry, etc. So they are controlling their stress by following a healthy
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 plan, exercising, etc. In
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 way, they are choosing to be healthy.
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, nowadays,
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 in the film industry are dead due to heart
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 is due to stress in their field and without a proper
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 plan. Exercising is
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 good to be healthy. Exercises like cycling, yoga, meditation, etc. are good for health. To sum up, I agree with the given statement that a
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 is said to be healthy when he/she follows a healthy food
diet
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, does exercise and avoids stress.
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