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The first man to walk on the moon claimed it was a step forward for mankind. However, it has made little difference in most people’s lives.

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There are many who feel that research into
space
 exploration has not made sufficient impact on the average individual’s life to justify its expense. In my opinion, there are valid reasons to ask
this
 question but overall the cultural and scientific effect is all-encompassing. Those who decry the wasted resources directed towards
space
 programs point out the lack of readily apparent benefits. Sending a man to the moon and maintaining expensive telescopes and
space
 stations do nothing for the average person struggling to pay their bills and vulnerable to sudden economic downturns. Most may casually watch the moon landing or the occasional NASA video on YouTube but
that is
 hardly justification for billions of dollars over decades that could have made a real difference if diverted towards medicine, education, infrastructure, and a vibrant employment sector.
Nonetheless
, the effects pertain deeply to culture and science.
Firstly
, putting a man on the moon was a moment that transcends mundane utilitarian concerns. It not only was an exercise in the power and majesty of the human race but
also
 inspired countless individuals across a wide variety of industries to push for great achievements and have pride in mankind.
Secondly
, the advances made while researching
space
 have led to concrete, beneficial discoveries.
For example
, there are now satellites in
space
 making possible phone calls and internet access nearly everywhere on Earth. Countless other large and small innovations from microchips to increased fuel efficiency are
also
 to some degree indebted to the national funding of
space
 exploration. In conclusion, far from being a waste of valuable resources,
space
 exploration has been the driving force behind the continued progress of humanity. It should
therefore
 continue to receive support.
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