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More and more people are relying on their private cars as a major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

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It is observed that the number of
people
 who depends on their own
cars
 as the main transportation is significantly increasing. There are some problems that can be caused by
this
 phenomenon, but there are
also
 some solutions to tackle the issue.
such
phenomenon
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 results in many problems. the
first
 problem would be the environmental issues. The more private
cars
 are used, the more
air
pollution
 can be caused.
For example
, every transportation releases carbon dioxide when they are moved, and it causes
the
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air
pollution
.
Moreover
, if
people
 choose not public transportations but their own
cars
, the number of
cars
 which moved has
increase
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.
Therefore
,
the
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more CO2 would be released by it. The
second
 one is
traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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jams
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. the number of
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private
cars
 which are used is too much compared with the limited road and in the end, it causes
traffic
jam
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jams
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.
Nevertheless
, there
some
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are some
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 keys which can solve it. The
first
 solution is
that
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encouraging
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encourage
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people
 to use
the
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public
transportations
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transport
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. It reduces not only
air
pollution
 but
also
traffic
jam
, rising the independence
on
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of
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private
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a private
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one
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ones
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. The
second
 key is
that
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apply
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encouraging
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encourage
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people
 to use
the
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electric
cars
, which utilize electricity for
the
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fuel. It makes
air
pollution
 be reduced, reducing
release
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the release
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 of CO2. The
last
 key is
that
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widening the road. It decreases the
traffic
jam
as
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by
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 increasing the amount of treating
transportations
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transportation
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. In conclusion,
although
 relying on their private
cars
 makes lots of
problem
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problems
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,
it
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they
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 can be solved by doing
such
 things mentioned above.
Thus
,
people
 should be encouraged to do
such
 things.
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