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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an idea that says the amount of food which is needed in a country should be produced inside the country as much as possible
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 of importing them from other
countries
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. I totally disagree with
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 idea, not only because of
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 conditions in some
countries
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,
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 but
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 because of
limitation
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 of water resources. The
weather
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 has an important role in agriculture. So,
countries
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 must consider the
weather
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 before they plant a crop. The
weather
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 in some regions is very cold or very warm during the year.
Countries
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 that are located in desert areas are not suitable for planting some
crops
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 which need cold
weather
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.
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, Dubai is located in a desert area, so they cannot plant onion or garlic. As well as
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, water resources in some
countries
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 are limited and they should save it for future generations. It is better for
countries
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 like South Africa to reduce their water consumption
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 of developing their agricultural industry. Producing all the food which is needed inside a country is not economical. Some
countries
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 can produce a crop cheaper than other
countries
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. So it is wise to import those
crops
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.
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, sugar which is produced in Cuba is cheaper than sugar which is produced in Iran. So it is crystal clear that Iran should import sugar from Cuba and produce more
crops
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 like saffron and pistachio. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea that
countries
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 should produce their needs
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 of importing them as much as they can. Given
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 situation, it seems
countries
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 should trade and import what they cannot produce and focus on producing
crops
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 they have a competitive advantage.
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  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
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