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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays transport system has become more convenient so the seller can import numerous items from different region
hence
 countries has become more and more similar . In my opinion, it is a negative development. On the one hand, the
products
 from other countries bring lots of conveniences.
For example
, the cleaning robot which was invented by a German company can help a household to clean up their home easily and increase the efficiency of cleaning. So some
people
 think buying the same
products
 anywhere in the world can bring beneficial impacts.
However
, it causes some negative influences.
On the other hand
, using the same
products
 in different areas can increase the speed of losing their own
culture
.
For instance
, more and more
people
 in Taiwan decided to listen to foreign music, like English
songs
, K-pop and J-pop
instead
 of Chinese
songs
.
Hence
 the singer in Taiwan did not want to produce new
songs
 which cannot earn money and Chinese
songs
 which played an important role in Chinese
culture
 vanished. So I think it will cause negative development if
people
 use the same
products
 in the world. To summarize,
although
 the
products
 which are produced by other countries can bring some benefits it
also
 causes some irreversible damage to our
culture
 so, in my opinion, I think it is a negative development for
people
 using the same
products
 worldwide. If the crowd do not try to deal with the problems the
culture
 will disappear someday in the near future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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