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Some people think that the public libraries are no longer necessary, others believe that public libraries still perform useful functions. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In order to gain more knowledge and find different types of articles,
libraries
 are the sources for many books. A few portions of the population think that
libraries
 are no longer required and the Other portion of mass says it is required for the development of
society
. In
this
 essay, I would discuss both views. Due to the advancement of technologies we have today, most of them spend
time
 reading the novels which are required as per their needs.
Second
, many people assume that the important importance of
libraries
 is no longer needed because they think it contains old books which are not updated regularly.
Third
, is the
time
 constraints which we have in today's
society
 many feel that it is better to read or find online rather than
traveling
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 and spend future commuting to
libraries
. To illustrate one example. most of my friends who are doing
Ph.D.
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 in science and technology are spending more
time
 surfacing the information rather than going to
libraries
 to study, The reason for
this
 is that they are occupied most of the
time
 doing other jobs and could not find
time
 for it.
On the other hand
,
libraries
 had played a huge role in
society
, especially for the underprivileged student, who cannot afford digital technologies. Many governments own schools and college has
libraries
 that are used by student for their exam preparation.
Second
 not all the books are available on the digital platform, so
this
 is one point where many still give importance to
libraries
.
Third
, employment opportunities are available because of
libraries
, Many people are live are dependent on them. In conclusion, I believe that
libraries
 play an important role in our
society
,
Although
 some may not able to go and study and feels that there is no longer important to visit.
However
, many feel that it has an essential role to play in the development of today's
society
.
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