some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Several people discuss that

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sentiment of contrast between kids should be abetted. While

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others think teenagers who are instructed to participate

instead

of rivalry are going to be more helpful in adulthood. In my opinion, both groups have interesting ideas and there are some benefits and drawbacks which I want to argue about. On the one hand, the context of competition has

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advantage

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,

such

as when children play together to

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achieve

achive

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achieve

a prize, they have to deal with issues and

that

is improve

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their strength,

thus

, in the

future

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they are going to solve problems in their lives,

for example

, they can be independent in their

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, and they do not panicking when they want to find a job, which is needed to be more flexible and calm when going to a job interview.

In addition

,

this

sense

is not brings

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cooperation skills,

therefore

, these kids will not able to join cooperating jobs, which is

neede

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needed

need

to help

eachother

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each other

as a team.

On the other hand

, pupils who learned to participate in

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teamwork

teamworks

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teamwork

,

they

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can easily find friends and colleagues in the future when they are working in big

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companies

componies

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companies

and firms, where their

supervisor’s

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ask them to work as a group, these individuals can conveniently deal with their assignments.

Nevertheless

, there is a negative point, which is they can not independent because they had not experienced finding solutions alone.

For instance

, when I was younger, I used to play with my teammates and

this

experience helped me a lot,

although

, I can not play solo sports very well as a

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consequence

of collaboration. To conclude, it depends on

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to choose which of these two procedures.

Furthermore

, there are advantages and disadvantages

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both ideas which I discussed.