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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or degative development.

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It is true that, in today's scenario,
technology
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 play's a vital role in an individual's
life
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 which affects the way
individuals
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 interact with each other. As
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 phenomenon will explain why
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 is happening and it
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 has deleterious development on society which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples and conclusions. To commence with,
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individuals
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 spend more
time
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 on modern
technology
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as a result
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 they do not give more
time
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 to their relationships.
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, they do not want any kind of interference from their
parents
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 in their
life
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 and they
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 use a lot of applications
such
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 as Instagram, Snapchat, Netflix and many more in their
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.
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, they become introverted people and they are
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 far away from their
parents
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 and friends. ,
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, they do not give
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 to their
parents
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 and old people and do not learn any kind of skills from their
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 and old person.
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 to
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, I have deleterious development of
individuals
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,
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 and foremost, they do not concentrate on their studies because they give more
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 to
technology
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.
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, a survey conducted in India shows that 70% of
individuals
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 who use
technology
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 are far aware of their studies and they get low grades study
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 they do not give any
time
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 to their
parents
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 and their face any difficulties in their
life
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.
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,
individuals
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 do not enhance their interpersonal skills because they give more
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 to
technology
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, as well as, they do not feel fresh and do not concentrate on other work. In conclusion,
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 masses go far away from their
parents
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 and do not give
time
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 to their relationships.
However
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, they become introverted people and
also
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 they do not want any kind of interference in their
life
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.
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