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There are many reasons that can mortivate a person to stay for the same company. Some believe that money is the main factor. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Employers are always seeking ways to motivate their employees to attract to the
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 for long. Many believe that money is the most significant cause of that. Despite different views on
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, I disagree with
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 argument because I believe that ability to keep a work-life balance and the career progression of a
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 play more crucial roles in the decision to work for a particular
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. Companies indeed provide good salaries, bonuses and perks to motivate their workers.
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, if
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 disturbs the work-life balance due to heavy workload or stress, they may leave the workplace. To be more specific, if a person has to work extra hours or is under stress, they may fail to have a good quality of family life.
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 they may end up with
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 depression and find a more pleasurable working environment. Only financial benefits can not grant pleasure and mental satisfaction. In Sri Lank,
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, a recent study revealed that many garment factory workers, change their factory within a year at least once due to heavy workload, despite good salary. Another important fact is that less opportunity for career development. Many employees' ambition is to have better
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 prospects and career progression. So, even if a
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 pay a high salary or intensive without giving a promotion, that will dissatisfy the worker.
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, they tend to move to better workplaces.
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 proves that a higher salary without
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 satisfaction leads to pushing employees to find a new place. In conclusion, even though some hold the view that money can decide the fact that staying in a
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 or not, I believe that work-life balance and opportunities for promotions are the most crucial reasons.
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