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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Spending
money
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 on transport systems is a duty of
governments
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, but nowadays there are two major transfer systems,
railways
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 and
roads
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 which both are incredibly important. In my side of view,
governments
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 are required to
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money
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 on
railways
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 rather than
roads
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. Some people claim that
roads
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 are much more important than
railways
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 as they are more convenient transportation and cheaper.
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,
roads
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 give
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 opportunity to passengers to pull over their car and enjoy the landscape whenever they want and for how long they want.
Also
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, road transportation provides much freedom in
departuring
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departing
departure
 time for passengers as they can start their journey at any time they like. With all these in mind, some people believe that
governments
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 should spend
money
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 on
roads
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. Having said that, I feel
governments
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 should spend
money
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 on a transport system which provides a wider range of advantages than only the public's comfort. With spending
money
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 on
railways
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 the air pollution of exhaust fumes due to cars
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roads
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 decreases significantly.
Railways
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 not only provide a more comfortable journey for passengers as they can sleep and walk during
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 time but
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, it is visibly more secure than
roads
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. In conclusion,
roads
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 are preferable by publicity due to
its
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 freedom and customizable timetable, I strongly believe if
governments
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 have to choose between spending
money
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 on
railways
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 or
roads
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, the decision should be the spending
money
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 on
railways
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 as they are more secure and using them provides less air pollution. As
governments
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 are responsible for air quality, people's security and so many other aspects of a decision not only public's comfort.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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