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Nowdays people are using more consumer goods like refrigerators or washing machines. Does this have more advantages or disadvantages ?

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People use electronic devices on a daily basis. Consumer goods
such
 as fridges and washing machines are used more and more often by consumers.
This
 essay will explain why the benefits of
such
 a trend far outweigh its disadvantages. Since the industrial revolution, companies have started developing refrigerators and washing machines, and all sorts of instruments to provide people with more leisure time.
Although
,
this
 has occurred with no regard to how these items would affect our environment.
For instance
, recent studies provided alarming evidence that in the
last
 century the levels of carbon emissions per capita increased fourfold only in America.
However
, it is fair to say that, not only do those key elements have still a minor role in climate change in comparison to other artefacts, but
also
 the fast-paced world we live in makes it impossible to sustain life without them.
In addition
, it is commonly known that many years ago domestic errands were a housewife's task to complete. Women had no time or value for themselves and
therefore
 they would live miserable lives.
This
 changed the moment electro domestics appeared.
For example
, it is thanks to these technological advancements that women around the globe can fulfil their dreams, have careers and become professionals. Daily domestic tasks are now easy to perform and they are not assigned to either female or male partners. In conclusion, no matter how detrimental to our world, citizens are in need of electronic devices in order to obtain a more balanced lifestyle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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