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In the future, nowbody will buy printed newspaper or book because they will be able to read everthing they want online without paying To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #nowbody #newspaper #book
Nowadays technological equipment is becoming an integral part of our daily life.
Therefore
, more and more people claimed that, because of the usage of technological utilities, purchasing a newspaper or
book
 will be getting rusty in the future years. It mostly disagrees that, using the newspaper and books lost their popularity in
next
 years. Admittedly,
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item which is used on a daily basis is becoming get credit these years, and most of the time society use these devices in order to solve their problem and do their work. Other than that,
their
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 are lots of apps that
used
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 to
the
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read
book
 and newspapers. Nowadays you couldn’t see the person reading
a
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 news from the newspaper. In that cases, some writers offer two options for their reader's PDF version and printed version of books.
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, those
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people,
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me
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 disagree with
this
 debate,
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 the idea about using the
book
 and newspapers is an essential activity for society.
Although
 the usage of electronica items gives easiness in some context of our life,
,
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however
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 it has been
the
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 negative impact on our mental and physical health.
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,
as a result
 of the research of scientists, way too much using the mobile phone, laptops, or tablets caused a deficiency of the sense of sight. What is more, when we use the internet for seeing the news or observing the new
book
, we have wanted best quality internet all the time,
,
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however
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it
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also
 reason for the dangerous effect on bee’s life. To sum up, according to all aspects of
community
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, I mostly believed that using the printed version of a
book
 most comfortable and convenient way for
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 every now and
then
. The thunder matter is that topic it doesn’t matter how we use to read we have to get loose reading something.
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