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One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - apologise for missing the birthday celebration - explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend - say whay you would like to do to show that you are sorry

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Dear Rahul, I hope you're doing good. I'
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 just writing to say sorry again for not making it to your
birthday
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 celebration
last
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 weekend. I'
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 sure you must be really mad at me and
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 why I want to apologise again. In the
last
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 25 years, there hasn'
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 been any year
when
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since
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 I didn'
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 attend your
birthday
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 party.
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 time
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, I modified my office trip and booked the return flight early just to attend the event but couldn'
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 make it due to some sequence of bad events. Once again, a big sorry for missing it. While I was on my way to
airport
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the airport
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, the taxi got an issue with its engine, and by the time I arranged
alternate
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an alternate
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 vehicle to reach the airport, the flight
already
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took
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taken
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 off from the runway.
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, in the hurry to enter the airport I lost my mobile phone
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, which I believe, I would have left in the taxi. I wanted to tell you all
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 that day only but I couldn'
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 even call you to inform
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you that
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 I will not be able to attend your
birthday
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 party. I know you are not going to accept my apology so easily, so just to surprise you, I have planned our long pending Goa trip to celebrate your
birthday
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 there. As a long weekend is approaching
next
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 week, I'
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 sure you will
also
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 be having off from your office. So, confirm your availability by
this
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 week so that I can confirm the bookings. I'
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 excited to meet you
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 weekend and let's make
this
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 trip a memorable one. Warm regards, Aman
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