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Some people believe that a good way to reduce crime is to have longer sentences, while others think that there are alternatives to this problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary era,
crime
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 rates have surged dramatically as compared to the past. To bring
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 alarming situation under control, society members think that
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leaving criminals in jails for extended terms can plummet the proportion of offences significantly.
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, there are those who argue that the punishment should depend on the seriousness of the
crime
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, in order to control
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 growing concern. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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later
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latter
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 and think that considering the situation of both the
crime
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 and the convict,
sentence
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the sentence
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 should be decided
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.
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, out of a plethora of suggestions, the most preponderant one is that criminals should be sent on a long sentence in order to teach them a vital lesson
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life
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.
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, when they waste a key time of their
life
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prison, they start to regret
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their mistakes,
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 learn from their errors.
Consequently
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, they become more disciplined citizens and learn to make better resorts.
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, a survey showed that 73% of prisoners who spent 10 years or more in jail, never did a
crime
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 again.
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, I think not all
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lawbreakers deserve to be locked behind bars for an indefinite sentence, rather the
penality
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penalty
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 should be decided after an evaluation of the offence.
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, it is a fair way of treating a criminal, as they have certain rights too. To illustrate, a trivial offender should be given an opportunity to dedicate some years of his
life
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 to
serve
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 the community,
instead
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 of
whole
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his whole
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life
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 in
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jail.
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, a terrorist or a murderer should be sentenced to death, in order to teach other wrongdoers an increasingly important lesson
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life
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. In conclusion, after putting forth all the substantial arguments, I can conclude that
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 spending most years of
life
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 in police custody can make crooks
obidient
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obedient
 residents, other alternatives like execution and serving the society should
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 be considered to bring the rate of offences down.
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