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Do you believe that scientific experimentation on animals is justified? Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?

#experimentation #animals #alternatives
In recent years, some people argue that advances in scientific technologies are only possible with a great number of trials on
animals
, whereas others mention that
this
 could justify suffering and cruelty affecting other species. I will explore the two questions asked and share my ideas.
Firstly
, I will explore the reasons for
experiments
 on
animals
.
Secondly
, I will show other ways of analyzing empirical tests.
Firstly
, the pursuit of knowledge is a concept that is valued in all cultures of the global world.
Consequently
, scientific discoveries are acceptable in a wide range of our society. But, ,,
however
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 almost all scientific discoveries involve a great number of trials on
animals
 in order to prevent health issues in humans. It needs to be addressed to true the reasons for
experiments
 as well
such
 as safety medicaments and cosmetics. Medicaments only come on the market, if they would be tested for a long time on
animals
. ,
Furthermore
, most cosmetics were tested in special trials on
animals
 like little rabbits or rats. Rising demand for these products puts pressure on scientific personnel and doing more laboratory
experiments
 as usually. On the other ,hand there are a number of concerns about animal investigations. The cruelty and the great suffering through
experiments
 are vital in a meeting when we think about alternatives for
experiments
. We really need to adopt a new approach to testing products and we should call more attention to animal welfare. It gives a wide range of alternatives for scientific research like the use of robots or another kind of artificial intelligence,
for example
.
In particular
, A robot can be repaired and doesn't have feelings or other kinds of emotions. In summary, i my opinion it is reasonable to find a new avenue for analysing scientific
experiments
. The great suffering of
animals
 needs to be stopped. The technological progress in our times makes it possible to think about alternatives for
experiments
 with
animals
. A good approach can be the use of robots in order to value research.
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