Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty. So rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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developed
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usually give
money
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to undeveloped
countries
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in order to uproot
poverty
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,
poverty
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exists in these
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. So there is an opinion that rich
countries
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should try other
ways
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to help those
nations
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instead
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of giving
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to them. I agree with
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opinion because there are more efficient
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to help poor
countries
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and in the following paragraphs, I shall explain these
ways
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. Undeveloped and poor
countries
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usually suffer from corrupt governments. When rich
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give financial help to poor
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, they spend it in
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that are not necessary. So it will be better to help them to develop their infrastructures
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of sending
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.
for example
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, rich
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can help to make roads, schools, and universities for undeveloped
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.
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, there are not good quality schools and universities in poor
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usually. So another way to uproot
poverty
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in these
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is to provide facilities for students who live in poor
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to study in developed
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. after graduation, they can back to their
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and help their countrymen to make factories and develop their nation.
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, they can make factories in poor
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and transfer knowledge gradually.
This
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will create jobs and help people who live in poor
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to make
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for themselves.
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, there are lots of tourist attractions in poor
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usually. So helping poor
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to extend their tourist industry can be a useful way in order to reduce
poverty
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. In
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situation, not only lots of jobs will make for them but
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their people will be familiar with other cultures and will understand how they can grow their country. In conclusion, giving
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to poor
countries
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cannot reduce
poverty
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in that
countries
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because corrupt governments in these
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spend
money
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in useless
ways
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. There are better
ways
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to help them like developing their infrastructures and industries, transferring knowledge, and allowing their students to study in rich
countries
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.
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