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Many people think that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while others argue that aid money is misspent by the governments that receive it and therefore international aid should not be given to poor countries. Discuss these two points of view and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that
nations
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 have a responsibility to provide
aid
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 to each other, while some thinks that donated money are misused by national and local officials, for that reason, foreign
aid
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 is not and should not be given to developing countries.
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 essay will discuss both opinions before giving a conclusion. On the one hand, accepting international
aid
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 is a big advantage, especially for smaller countries. It is a tool to decrease poverty, in which sufficient supplies are loaded, like medical supplies, food and services.
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, funds given by another state can help improve education and infrastructure projects that could boost the employment and economy of the country.
On the other hand
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, it is commonly seen in the news and
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 well-known by the majority of people that several government officials are corrupt. They steal the funds that are given by other
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 and use them for their personal gains.
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, Typhoon Haiyan
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 2013 destroyed an area in the Philippines. Many livestock, possessions and houses are destroyed, a great number of dead people are on the streets and those that survived we're begging for help. Several
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 donate assistance, like money, food, water, etc,
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, no
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 was provided to the city because the government kept it to themselves. What is more, a country that offers foreign
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 sometimes wants an interest in return. They keep providing assistance to poor
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, in order to exploit them and become independent from others. In my opinion, it is better for a country to not seek foreign
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, especially if the citizens have become too dependent on other states
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 of standing up on their two feet.
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