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the best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
It is a good step and
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in fact
infact
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in fact
 beneficial in order to control the fatal
road
accidents
, which are occurring on a daily basis, due to the reckless driving by many truck
drivers
,
that is
 to retake the driving test every year. While
this
 procedure is challenging on practical grounds
but
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, I am in
a
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strong
favor
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 of adopting
this
 approach.
This
 essay will discuss my point of view in detail. Nowadays, a number of
road
accidents
 happen, just because of the irresponsible
behavior
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by
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 heavy transport
drivers
. Most of them do not have enough training and got
license
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 by a chance.
In addition
 to it, many of them are not following speed limits resulting
deadly
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road
accidents
.
Hence
, from my
perspective
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this
 is a good way to improve the safety
on
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 roads by reviewing the
license
 of those, who are driving huge trucks once
in
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a year. Another benefit of revising the test is to make sure that
legal
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 number of
such
drivers
 by checking records.
In addition
 to it, retesting will put emphasis on
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the motorist
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motorist
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 to act in a responsible manner
hence
 they try to improve their driving skills. Along with
this
, several goods transport
are
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 heavily loaded and needs a
proper
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 trained and
skillful
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 person to drive, to avoid a chance of an accident.
Thus
, reviewing the
license
 may improve government records,
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drivers
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 skills and as well as
this
 will give
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job
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 to the right candidate. To sum up, I believe it is a nice way to improve the quality of
road
 traffic and it has
significant
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 impact on controlling daily
road
accidents
 by encouraging large transport
drivers
 to revise their driving
license
 each year,
also
 it develops a sense of responsibility in them.
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