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Formal You are looking for a full-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest to get registered with your employment agency as I am looking for a suitable part-time
job
. I am hoping you would enlist me in your database and notify me of suitable
job
 announcements and forward my resume to prospective employers. I am Hansen Lee, an international student at the University of Westminster and my major is Business Administration. I am originally from Japan and will be staying in London for the
next
 couple of years. To support my education cost and to gain some
job
 experience, I am seeking a suitable part-time position. I can work as an administrative assistant, customer experience manager or as a salesperson in a retail shop. I can spare time from 4.30 pm onwards on weekdays and full-time on weekends. I have previously worked as a customer support officer in a call centre in Japan and as a sales executive in a superstore in London. I have attached my Curriculum Vitae with
this
 letter for your kind consideration which
further
 details my education and work experience. I look forward to hearing from you and getting the details process to register with your
job
 agency. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Hansen Lee
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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