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İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

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Migration has crucially affected the general public. In
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 trend and measures we need to take to arrest the situation To commence with, individuals want to move to developed
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 not only to get higher education but
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 for the best standard of living. To be more clarified, their home
countries
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 do not prove them with accurate qualifications due to a lack of technology.
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, the community of
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 decide to go outside to get a quality education.
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, individuals get higher packages and a better lifestyle.
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, foreign
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 invite them to do work there by introducing new job vacancies.
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, they migrate to developed
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 by leaving their own
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.
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, immigration leads to some negative impacts on immigrating
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.
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, they can not receive what they expect.
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, to survive in foreign
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, they need to face a lot of challenges and problems
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 as a language barrier.
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, sometimes
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 decided to settle there and they will never come back to their home
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.
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, developing
countries
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 will lose their skilled workers. Ultimately, gaps arise between developing
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 and developed
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.
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,
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 will adopt a new language and new culture
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 with the lifestyle of international
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. In conclusion, no doubt, the community will move to other
nations
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 for the purpose of studying and working to get a quality education and a better lifestyle until higher authorities will not take steps toward a better future. Even it is the responsibility of the government to provide them with great infrastructure and opportunities so that they can stay in their home
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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