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Many people feel that urban environments are more unhealthy than they have ever been to. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem?

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The provided
two
 pictures compare the layout of Stanford Park as it was in 2009 and 2014. Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that the main changes that had been between these
two
 years were replacing the industrial areas with trees and a swimming pool.
Also
,
two
 new buildings had been erected,
such
 as the harbour on the sea and the university building. The fishing area and the sea, which are located in the east of Stanford Park, remained unchanged, as well as
two
 swimming pools, located to the southwest of the fishing field. The school and the convention centre had not witnessed any alterations. A huge industrial area in the southwest part of the park was replaced by trees and a new university building. Another one, which was encircled by footpaths, was turned into a small swimming pool. The footpath that passes through the woods leads to the new harbour. Another change was that the number of residential buildings
was
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doubled.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overpopulation
  • Pollution
  • Resources
  • Industrial activities
  • Emissions
  • Waste disposal
  • Garbage accumulation
  • Ventilation
  • Infrastructure
  • Globalization
  • Green spaces
  • Lifestyle
  • Healthy habits
  • Air quality
  • Water pollution
  • Soil contamination
  • Environmental damage
  • Health risks
  • Sustainable development
  • Public transportation
  • Renewable energy
  • Recycling
  • Urban planning
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