Many people feel that urban environments are more unhealthy than they have ever been to. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem?

The provided

two

pictures compare the layout of Stanford Park as it was in 2009 and 2014. Overall, a glance at the graph reveals that the main changes that had been between these

two

years were replacing the industrial areas with trees and a swimming pool.

Also

two

new buildings had been erected,

such

as the harbour on the sea and the university building. The fishing area and the sea, which are located in the east of Stanford Park, remained unchanged, as well as

two

swimming pools, located to the southwest of the fishing field. The school and the convention centre had not witnessed any alterations. A huge industrial area in the southwest part of the park was replaced by trees and a new university building. Another one, which was encircled by footpaths, was turned into a small swimming pool. The footpath that passes through the woods leads to the new harbour. Another change was that the number of residential buildings

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doubled.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

163 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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