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A group of people believe that smoking in the public should be banned. Other groups of people argue that it should not. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that smoking in public should be prohibited, while some think
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This
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 essay will explain both views before giving a conclusion. On the one hand, smoking in public ignores the right of non-smokers to inhale clean and fresh air.
Firstly
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, smoking can
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 harm to the smoker, as well, as to those who inhale it. Adults and children are most common highly affected by
this
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 kind of activity. It causes diseases in non-smokers like lung cancer and tuberculosis. Smoking in public
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 invites those individuals that stop smoking to engage in that kind of activity because of the smell it produces. It
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 causes annoyance to people that smell a foul odour that came from smoking.
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, smoking can
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 harm to the environment as well. It causes pollution to the area where there is the majority of people and sometimes once an individual has done smoking, they just throw the remains everywhere.
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, Banning to
smoke
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 in public will
cause
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 outrage among those engaging in the activity. They will feel that they are suppressed by the government because their freedom to
smoke
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 in public places we're denied. Smoking is like an addiction to those uses. Some say that it is a way for them to relieve the stress and pressure that they experience in their daily life. Once a person engages in smoking, it is hard for them to stop. What's more, banning smoking in public will
cause
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 some businesses to deflate, like the tobacco sector, bars and pubs. In my opinion, smoking should be banned in public places with respect to people who don't
smoke
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 and those that stopped smoking.
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 they should be provided with a private area in which they
smoke
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 freely, because, unfortunately, it is difficult for smokers to quit smoking just because the government said so.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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