Some people think only the best students should be rewarded with academic distinctions; others think we should reward weaker students who make progress. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people argue that only can the best
students
be
rewareded
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rewarded
with academic distinctions. The opponents suggest praising
students
who improve
performance
at
school
. I, personally, think that we should reward both the best
students
and other
students
who get better marks than before.
To begin
with, the best
students
who achieve top
performance
at
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classes and extra-curricular activities should receive academic distinctions. Top
students
deserve
honor
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because they study diligently to get excellent
performance
at
school
. Rewarding the best
students
can
also
encourage other
students
to study harder to get the awards.
This
rewarding strategy can create a better atmosphere for
students
at
school
. Some
students
might get ordinary marks at
school
at
first
, and they make progress to get better results in the exams and other community activities.
By acknowledging
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these weaker
students
with awards can encourage these
students
to study even harder at
school
.
For example
, the name of the
students
who make
greatest
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progress can be listed in the
school
newspaper.
Students
might become one of the top
students
in class.
On the other hand
, if we only speak highly of the top
students
, the other schoolchildren will become frustrated when their contributions to the coursework
has
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not been noticed by the teachers. They might lose faith in
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improving
imroving
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improving
performance
at
school
. To sum up, I think that awards should be provided to not only the
students
with
best
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performance
but
also
who have made great progress.
This
educating
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strategy will stimulate
students
to
further
improve their achievement.
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